Serial Date

Trying something new and tried keeping the story short. I don’t think I was too successful but glad I gave it a go.

Liz nervously fidgeted at the table. When she answered the ad she made a promise to herself the blind date would happen in a public place. Startled, she nearly knocked over her water when a handsome blonde haired man said hello from across the table. Liz stood, “Hello, Graham?” she shakily said reaching out to shake his hand. Graham was more handsome than she imagined and the two sat talking and what she thought had some sort of chemistry. She hadn’t felt a connection with anyone since her husband passed in a horrific head-on car crash with a drunk driver several years back. Liz felt so comfortable around Graham almost as if she had known him for years.

The evening was going better than she had imagined when a gentleman at the bar caught her eye. He was staring at her so intently it caused Liz to shiver. She didn’t want to do anything to spoil her date and shifted in her chair away from the man at the bar. Graham was in the middle of a story about his sister and a spider when the waitress interrupted with a glass of lemonade and a napkin ready to set underneath and said, ‘Excuse me, sir, do you own a black sedan?’ Graham nodded. ‘Your lights are on.’ Graham excused himself to go and turn the lights off. ‘Miss, there is a note on the inside of the napkin just open it. Please read it before he gets back.’ The waitress almost seemed to be pleading.

‘Dear Liz,
 YOU ARE IN DANGER! My name is Graham and I am the gentleman that was supposed to meet you here tonight. I was sitting at the bar watching you. I was so mesmerized and thought that I wasn’t good enough for you so I essentially stood you up. That’s when I noticed that a gentleman introduced himself and you two seem to be hitting it off well. Behind the bar, the TV is on the news station and they just aired the report about the serial killer that has been murdered thirteen other women that have the same characteristics as you. Between the bartender and me, we have him distracted for you to read this and the cops are on their way. When he gets back, do the best you can to kill time (no pun intended) and try not to give anything away.

Liz didn’t have time to process exactly everything that was happening and as soon as the imposter sat down in front of her she could tell he knew something was up. ‘Is everything ok Liz?’ the man asked. She nodded tried making small talk nervously watching the door waiting for her rescue. Graham stood, ‘This evening has been going so well, I don’t want to jinx anything. Would you like to go on a second date?’ Liz nodded and before she could answer he told he would be in contact and walked out the door. She stood and the real Graham was by her side offering comfort. ‘Hi, I’m Graham. You look lovely tonight.’ Liz smiled then jumped into his arms when the gunshots started. Graham tucked her into his embrace while backing up. The cops questioned her after the scene was cleared. Liz learned that he was, in fact, the serial killer and she was going to be his next victim. She only had one question. How did he know her date’s name? Wait. He never said his name was Graham.

Change (advanced)-Section 2: Lecture 13

Trying to get back on track with my writing and need to make up a lot of work both class and personal. The last lecture/writing exercise was about character flaws. This lecture is about changes. How the character overcomes his/her flaws. I went back to refresh my memory and my character was a pirate that hated conflict and now he needs to overcome his issue with conflict. To refresh your memory as well here’s the pirate that couldn’t handle conflict-Oh and I only have 10 minutes.

The pirate captain, Mamoon sat in his room cradling his forehead in his fingertips worrying about the next raid. He could over hear his crew bantering back and forth followed by laughter. He knew deep down they were laughing at him and planning a mutiny. Mamoon decided that his ship and crew will travel the seas tonight in search for a ship to raid. With all the courage he had he busted through his door onto the deck and yelled at his men to prepare the ship and lift anchors. The men scurried about trying to get the ship in order. He could see that he took the men by surprise and was pleased with the hustle around him. The ship sailed into the darkness only the moonlight leading the way. In the distance the captain could see a larger ship; one he knew was too much. He hid his fear well. Deep down he knew this ship had to have twice as many men as he. He looked and he didn’t recognize his crew’s expressions. It was fear! A lack of confidence! He saw that his men didn’t want to battle anyone from this ship. He sneered at how the tables have turned and in that moment he found courage. Mamoon quietly told his men what to do and before he realized it, he was the first on the ship. He stealthily entered the captain’s room to find him passed out belly down obviously due to the empty rum jug on the floor. He carefully roped the captain’s hands behind his back and quickly shoved a gag into his mouth. The wide-eyed captain couldn’t warn his crew. Mamoon rushed onto the deck to find his crew quietly scuffling with the other ships’ crew into submission and binding their hands and feet. As the men sat tied up Mamoon and his men took all the booty they could plunder. As Mamoon boarded his own boat he could feel his crew respect. (I ran out of time.)

Flaws (advanced)-Section 3: Lecture 11

This was a difficult writing exercise. Following the lecture was a snap and completely understood the end goal. I don’t know if I’m overthinking the material and prompt or is it writer’s block? I know it doesn’t help that I have a toothache (dental appointment and tooth extraction scheduled for tomorrow). For this 10-minute writing prompt exercise, I had to pick a number 1-10 for the character and then again for the random flaw. The name of the exercise is. ‘What needs fixing?’ Find a character with some sort of unexpected flaw and give it a try. This exercise helped me realize that this can help add dimension to my characters.

A pirate (character) that hates conflict (flaw):

The last looting adventure was a complete blunder. The owners of the ship were so strong and intimidating. I know my crew thinks that I can’t run this ship and are already planning to take my vessel from me. It’ll probably be better if I just give it to them because they’re right. What kind of pirate am I to back down from a tea merchant? He was just a little man but he had a brute personality and I know he meant that he wasn’t going to give his tea to just anyone. It was better for all involved to go separate ways. Maybe the next raiding voyage we do should be at night when everyone is sleeping. We can sneak on the targeted boat, grab what we want, and quietly leave.

Uniqueness (advanced)-Section 3: Lecture 9

I haven’t really ever given a lot of thought into a character’s uniqueness. This exercise helped me explore and see past a stereotype of a character. The writing exercise is to take a character that people stereotype the list 5 surprises hence the 5 Surprises exercise.

A Professor of Chemistry

  1. Graduated with a 2.3 GPA
  2. Doesn’t like to be hands-on
  3. Plays pool every night while drinking beer
  4. Doesn’t like teaching
  5. Eats processed foods

A Cheerleader

  1. Afraid of heights
  2. Doesn’t like to be social
  3. Isn’t popular
  4. Stays up late painting
  5. Loves to eat chocolate everything

You think I nailed the exercise? This has given me something to think about especially for our character Fenton or the short story serial Grotesque Angel.

I hope you’ll give this exercise a try because it helped me realize a few things.

Section 2 Lecture 6: Action

Well, I’m having the most difficult time wrapping my head around my class writing exercise. They’re covering, ‘don’t tell, show’ aspect of writing and how actions play a key roll in character building. In this exercise, timer set for 10 minutes, I choose a character (they provide in lecture notes) and the setting of a busy coffee shop when a really angry/unhappy stranger starts yelling at them. This is where I’m supposed to show not tell how my character reacts. Ugh, here goes nothing:

The constant chatter, the banging of cups against their mismatched saucers, customers ordering their skinny lattes with half pumps of flavoring, and baristas yelling customers by their misspelled names was almost too much for Agent Wayne Tanner. He just needed a quick pick-me-up boost before going back to work on Tabitha’s case. The missing girl case turned into a murder case. The crime scene was brutal and the photos did it too much justice. Taking in a deep swallow of caffeinated nectar his chair was pushed and coffee spilled all down the front of his new tie.
‘Get up! You’ve been sitting there long enough! There are other people here wanting to sit!’ the stranger yelled at Wayne. He just groaned and rolled his eyes as he wiped the coffee off. The coffee shop suddenly went quiet. The chair was hit again. The violence of the crime scene came rushing to the forefront of his thoughts and without realizing Agent Tanner stood while simultaneously kicking the chair out from underneath him. The agency badge now visible to the angry impatient stranger.
‘I understand that your hipster needs outweigh that of others as you would like to sit and enjoy your double foam extra shot of BS in a cup. I can see how your world is now turned upside and you will need a hug and a social media prayer chain. It’s more important that you feel all warm and comfortable in your natural surroundings than say a detective taking a much-needed break from finding a little girls killer. Heaven forbid if it was someone like your sister or mother but I’m sure you would understand that an important piece of evidence was overlooked when the detective wasn’t able to take the break needed to regroup long enough to drink a coffee and go back with fresh eyes. Who knows, maybe the killer is in here right at this moment and is overlooked because the detective was interrupted.

Shoot, my time is up! What do you think? Did I make the assignment? Did I tell or show?

Writing Exercise Lesson 2: Synopsis

So, this was an optional exercise to my writing course that I opted to try. I’m supposed to write in a genre I normally wouldn’t (wasn’t going to choose erotica but would love to dabble in that much like Anne Rice) and decided on romance. It WAS DIFFICULT. I spent an hour writing then realized I was writing an entire story. I was inspired by the daily prompt hosted by Dee and Kristian, Solace. I’m supposed to keep it 500-Words or less. Grr, so frustrated with this one. I kind of want to pursue this as a longer story but I don’t know if it’s worth it. Would you want to read this story?

After the Great Fall, the war of fallen democracy and the Cleansing Of the Sects, the religious war, Darcy made a vow to her heritage after these wars to keep her bloodline as pure as possible. She wanted to carry on her family’s old ways, be madly in love, and live the simple life of a pagan. The Sect of the Eight Divines meant nothing to her as she was an outcast branded as a heathen along with the rest of her people. They only controlled every aspect of life for the rest of the population.

Life was great until she ran into Joseph at the shopping arena. Her promise to herself is stronger than her will or so she thought. Joseph, a member of the Pure Sect, the highest in the colonies, is mesmerized by the simple pagan girl. His repeated attempts to win her over are rejected by Darcy but a slow friendship forms. They believe that the other wanted to keep a friendship not knowing of the sinful love they feel for each other until one fateful decision. Both in pain, not able to be with each other was almost too much to live with.

It’s either banishment for Joseph or Cleansing rights for Darcy. The decision was made for them long before they first set eyes on each other. Solace can be found in the most unknowingly wanted forms.

Section 2: Lecture 5 – Writing Class Exercise

Someone just tap danced on my last nerve and instead of losing my temper (or rage eating) I thought I would catch up on one of my lectures. For this exercise I was supposed to pick a character in a situation and write about what they could be thinking for 10 minutes:

I think my companion forgot about me. I can’t get through the front door no matter how much I try to grasp the handle.  I’ll check the windows. Damn, can’t even see in them I’m so short. I’ll run around to the front door. Still can’t get in. The sky is really dark and the rain is starting to pelt me on my back. I think the neighbors are home, I can smell home cooked food and can hear them talking. I hope they don’t mind if I come in from the rain. I’m starting to get soaked to the bone and would like to find my companion. I’m starting to get worried that they might be in stuck in the same storm or worse.  Oh, hey, I’m glad you opened the door. Can I get some help and shelter from the storm? This is great! It’s warm in your house and thanks for letting me use this towel to dry off. I forgot! My companion’s name is on my jewelry. Can you call and let him know that I can’t get in the house?

My character was a  dog finds shelter in a rainstorm. I’m going to try this exercise again because I think it will be valuable in the Fenton Friday project.

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