The Friday Fictioneer is perfect for my short story goal to write on Friday when I’m drawing a blank. I started an entire story then realized it needed to be 100 words or less and did some major editing. Happy Friday guys!
It was Betty’s chore to walk up the hill. No one suspects a child because all the children played on the mountainside. The fire was dying under the copper kettles and tubing but she arrived in time to toss more kindling over the dying flame. Feeling accomplished she watched the flame roar back to life.
Betty looked over the mountainside and noticed glowing fires were being extinguished. She knew this meant the fire that she just brought back to life now has to be extinguished. Working quickly she could hear dogs coming and hid. Moonshining was an illegal family business.
Taking over the family trade. Nicely done.
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Oh, I like how you put that 🙂 Thank you.
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Nice build up of intrigue to the last sentence.
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Thank you! I think it’s a writing style for me with only having so few words. 🙂
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cool! Liked this one and welcome to Friday Fictioneers Jo!!
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Thank you…happy to be here 🙂
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Nothing like a bit of illicit moonshining 😉
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Hehe 🤭
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Your editing skills are sharp. This came out clean and was well told. Good job.
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Oh, thank you 🙂 I went from 600 words to 100. These are nice fun challenges.
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Wow! That makes it even more impressive. Are you planning on using the longer version? Maybe expanding?
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I thought about it. Just a bit more detail 🙂
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Welcome. And a noteworthy debut.
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Thank you 🙂 It was a pure joy to participate.
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Dear Jo,
That was a creative spin on the prompt. Kudos for the editing job. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Oh thank you! 🙂
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Excellently done. I see her responsible mind.
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Thank you 🙂 I like to think in that era a certain maturity was needed with the children.
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The sense of intrigue & mystery throughout – brilliant.
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Thank you! 😊
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Love your Avatar! And what a fun take on the prompt. Never too young to get involved in the family biz…
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I guess they did have to learn while they were young 🙂
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